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NintendoDude (2015-06-10 23:33:53)spooky
You in the club, stylin' with dough,
Profilin' with hoes that we boned, a while ago
Profilin' with hoes that we boned, a while ago
Perfect_Chaos (2015-06-14 10:12:46)Now this creepypasta has its flaws. While the idea is unique, a creepy message sent by an anonymous person, there could be some improvements.
The creepiness...there is very little of this. See, you need to build up the atmosphere, you can't just throw the reader into a scary scene and expect them to be sp00ked.
The Development and Setting: As AntiChris said, this needs to be improved as well. You see, we do not know anything about any of the characters, well, we know who they are, but we do not know they're motives, why did Bush stand next to Osama? Who is Brandoin? Wheere are they? You gave little to no details on where they were standing. They could be in a plane, a desert, or falling in a volcano from an airplane, we simply do not know.
Therefore, I must give this creepypasta a 1/10. It's a good idea, but needs A LOT, and I mean A LOT of work. Alright, remember to rate, like and subscribe, see ya.
GawdHydra (2015-06-29 07:37:08)11/10 -IGN
If ye wish to talk to me, xbox app (or XBOX itself), my gamertag is Godhydra.
Elim (2015-07-02 17:19:38)Meia's terrible joke was creepier than this
The very idea of actually creating a signature makes me tired
little5 (2015-07-03 18:15:37)Have you heard the one about the miniature clairvoyant that escaped from prison?
-rage
2am (2015-11-24 09:37:17)oh shet 3spooky5me
she screamed, shoving him backwards,"i can make all the tables turn!"
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A man stood next to Osama.
It was Bush.
But that's not all.
They recieved an anonymous message from a 3DSPlaza member.
They were baffled by it. They could not, for their life, figure out who sent it.